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Patrick Jordan's avatar

I knew that you would rise like the Kraken to the O.K. Szion.

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I'm getting a hint of Shakespear.

If i were a word-nerd I'd probably put it out there that the contestants mimick the style of other poets but Alas! I found Shakespear unreadable. Made me feel dumb because I know school kids who were forced to read him. But without historical context I can't imagine that any red-blooded, blue-blooded, or green-blooded american of any age could have a clue what Willy was on about.

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I have no clue what I just read, but I know that it is good.

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As me 'n' da gurls in da Hood wud say:

Git da Hale otta heyar!

fo real? Yous and da Shakeyman be cuzins?

Whut da odds oh dat?

Dat pretty Odd!

Well, you show the family traits: high art that is indecipherable for us low-born, low-brow peasant types.

Yes, I could have looked up the references and used inferences and might have gone: What a clever boy!

But it really is good to have exposition by the artist showing the deep thought that was put into what might seem as casual references to those in the know. It makes it al the more homey and accessible, homey.

I am indeed familiar with the entire Jack Family.

Jack Shit, Jack Beanstalk, Jacked Up, etc.

I obsessively curry comb what I write. I guess I just like the stink, stank, stunk.

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They don't care if we sputter and spew

They dont care if floods drown up a few

They live safe in that bunker

Dance, drink and spelunker

They CHEER when we die, yes its true

We rise, some insist that we do

They say "we've got guns" but that view

Means little in fact

When 5G is a tact

Control is but a turn of the screw

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Patrick Jordan's avatar

This is what I was afraid of:

That the comments will be better than the Stack!

isn't that always the way?

great jam.

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Akgrrrl's avatar

Thankyou kindly (curtseys)

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Victory Palace's avatar

OMG PJ, this is fantastic! It’s an honor and a privilege to be included in hurdy gurdy wordy exercise.

My parents fought so much, a hurricane formed and swirled through the neighborhood. I dashed into my room to avoid the gloom, as the house uprooted and flew into the air.

(That’s all I got for now on this groggy Monday morning…a memory mixed with the Wizard of Oz)

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Patrick Jordan's avatar

My siblings fraught sow much, being tossed to-and-fro by the Winds of Change. The dashboard in our room revealed no more numbers past The Pin for the speed of the shape we were in.

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Victory Palace's avatar

“Press agents for the devil”… that really nails it hahaha. And yes at times it gets to be a drag as I’d rather poeticize about life’s beauty and goodness from time to time.

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Patrick Jordan's avatar

It's on then.

No holds barred and no bars held.

Check out the comments we have a descendant of The Bard regaling us with his smithery and another fair lass who threw her vocabulary into the Ring.

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Jeannettecally Modified's avatar

I Love this idea!! Sounds like so much fun!

Ode to Muah ?? Thank You!

Stringing words together that make no sense

Brain cells almost firing, waiting for a spark ...

It may be a while ...I'm still in the dark........

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Patrick Jordan's avatar

Love your Hi Coo.

I've wondered what it would be like to not be able to string words together to make a coherent sentence, but then I've read people's comments on my Stacks and it's clear that I'm already there!

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